시원스쿨 아이엘츠/토플

선생님~ 제가 문제 풀이 및 강의 복습을하면서 2.2번에 대한 글쓰기 연습과 모범 답안을 비교해서 보았는데요.

역시 모범답안에 비해 저의 답은 터무니없는거 같은데요ㅠㅠ

제가 써본 답안지에 대해 잘못된 표현방식들이 무엇들인지, 저의 답안은 모범답안에서 추구하는 틀에서 많이 벗어나있는지가 궁금해서 질문드립니다.

► 제가 써본 답지입니다.

The diagram explains how recycled paper is made from old newspapers.

First, some newspaper is torn into small pieces and put into a bowl.

Then, the paper added 250ml of water is left to soak for up to an hour.

Next, the mixture is beaten for about 45 seconds until it is formed into a pulp by using an electric mixer.

When it is ready, the pulp is poured into a shallow tray and a further 100ml of water is added. It is mixed together by hand

Then, the pulp mixture is lifted out of the tray by using a pieced of mesh to carefully, the water is allowed to drain.

Next, an old newspaper is opened up and the pulp mixture is placed inside any excess water is forced out by using a rolling pin.

Finally, your new paper is left to dry in a warm place for at least 24 hours.