빅아이엘츠 MASTER - Speaking [Academic/General Training] 답변이 맞나 확인 부탁드립니다. 파트 2
작성자 : 한덕*·등록일 : 2021.06.27·조회수 : 1,371
이전글 다음글안녕하세요. 질문에 대한 답 확인 부탁드립니다 Q. Who you helped. Why you helped How you helped this person What the result was Explain how you felt about helping this person A. I recently helped my girlfriend. Recently, she is ready to get a job. She applied lots of company, but the result was too bad. She taught the reason was cv , resume ‘s detail. I also prepared cv, resume before , I was only option to her. First, i need to know her whole life and big issue to match her strength. I heard everything and try to focus how to fit on the cv. She had many experience of part time jobs such as restaurant, cafeteria. And she learned how to treat customer and solve the complain. So I combined that experience and Job required. Finally, she got an opportunity to work in CJ internship. She was very happy, I also felt happy satisfied and accomplishments too. And when i helped her I was more concentrated in this situation. That is all that I can say now. 전반적인 내용에서 더 좋은 표현이나 문장 구성 등 피드백 부탁드립니다.
쉐리박 선생님의 답변(2021.06.28)
안녕하세요 수강생님
공부 질문 답변 칸의 한계로 디테일한 수정과 문장 구성 등의 피드백은 불가하오니 더 자세한 피드백 및 문장 표현은 스피킹 첨삭서비스를 이용해 주시길 바랍니다.
올려주신 답변은 관사 중심으로 문법 정리만 하여 다시 올려드립니다. 전체적으로 시제 및 문장 구성이 좀더 조밀하고 통일성이 있어야 6.0 대 이상 점수가 가능하십니다.
I recently helped my girlfriend. Recently, she is ready to get a job. She applied for lots of companies, but the result was too bad. She told me the reason was cv, resume‘s detail. I also prepared cv, resume before. I was the only option to her. First, I need to know her whole life and the big issue to match her strength. I heard everything and try to focus on how to fit on the cv. She had many experiences of part-time jobs such as restaurant, cafeteria. And she learned how to treat a customer and solve the complaint. So I combined that experience and Job required. Finally, she got an opportunity to work in a CJ internship. She was very happy, I also felt happy, satisfied and accomplished too. And when I helped her, I was more concentrated in this situation. That is all that I can say now.
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