시원스쿨 아이엘츠/토플

안녕하세요 선생님 ielts writing 수강 중입니다.
첨부된 파일의 문제를 풀던 중 궁금한 점이 있어서 질문드리게 되었습니다.

도표에 관한 강의만 보다가 해당 유형의 map을 처음 보게 되었는데요. 파일에 첨부된 답안을 보니 정말 딱 무엇이 건설되었고, 기대되는 물리적 변화만 기술이 되어 있더라구요. 혹시 제가 쓴 것 처럼 기대되는 사회적 변화를 쓰면 안되는 것일까요? 아래는 제가 쓴 답안입니다.

The map above is describing a plan for a city, which is designed to be a new housing complex. There is going to be a huge change in the city in that it was largely filled with people who work at the factory, but soon it would be full of vibrancy coming from young parents and kids.
The most distinguishable feature here is that all the basic infrastructure that people need will be all located in this town. While it was a place for factory without any apartment or villas, it seems like it is going to attract more people from neighboring towns with its newly built social facilities. As more people and cars are expected, there will also be more roads constructed.
That would not be the only change in this town, the farmland across the river could expect more profits as well. Since there will be more people in the town, farmers will have more customers for their produce. They could sell right to the town residents without having to travel a long distance to deliver their products. They would have an edge over other sellers since they could provide freshest farm products to the residents.
Overall, there will be more people coming in to the town and the atmosphere will dramatically change due to all the constructions that are planned through. The farmers will also have benefit from the urban plan as well.

감사합니다.