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i agree that people care more about their physical fitness than in the past
Most of all, many people are have resistered for the fitness center than in the past, when i run the fitness center.
Some members are interesting ingredient food and healthy beverage.
Also, they are talking to health everyday, everytime
therefore, i agree that people care more about their physical fitness than in the past
이렇게 답변하면 어떨지 검토부탁드립니다!
제이크 선생님의 답변(2019.03.25)
안녕하세요! 피드백 드려요.
1. 이유 문장에 동사가 2개 사용되었어요.
2. Some members are interesting ingredient food and healthy beverage.
- are interested in 으로 해주세요.
3. Also, they are talking to health everyday, everytime
- talking about 으로 바꿔주세요.
나머지는 무난히 잘 하셨습니다.
의도한 한글 문장도 같이 적어주시면 더 자세한 피드백을 드릴 수가 있어요.
감사합니다 ^^
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